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Moriah Leila

  • Fantasy Short Stories Re: Dreams of Giants

    The cutthroat's intimidating, slow stride accompanied him to the counter. Accompanied? It sounds almost like the cutthroat's stride is walking next to him. I don't think accompanied is the proper ...

    Mar 17, 2009
  • General Fiction Short Stories Re: Fake, or Real?

    I didn't have time to read what other people had to say, so I apologize if I repeat anything that has already been said. I want to focus more on ...

    Mar 17, 2009
  • Fantasy Short Stories Re: Dreams of Giants

    Well done, this is much improved! A lot of the corrections I had to made were just grammar, so that is fantastic! Perhaps our world is real, but perhaps it ...

    Mar 17, 2009
  • General Fiction Short Stories Re: Fresh Out of Luck

    Ian sat at his computer, scrolling down the screen of engagement rings. A smile played at his lips as he imagined his girlfriend’s reaction. Leslie was his dream girl; she ...

    Mar 16, 2009
  • Historical Fiction Short Stories Re: Vashoa's Life

    I didn't get a chance to read the other reviews, so hopefully I don't repeat anything. Vashoa started back to the old, ramshackle farmhouse where she dwelt with her ma ...

    Mar 16, 2009
  • Historical Fiction Short Stories Re: Vashoa's Life

    I didn't read any of the other critiques, so I apologize if I repeat anything. It really helped how short you kept this, so that I was able to really ...

    Mar 10, 2009
  • General Articles Re: The Test

    Here is your review as requested. My keyboard has been on the fritz, so please excuse any misspellings. "Come on everybody, pull your cards and get in line!" a tall ...

    Mar 10, 2009
  • Fantasy Short Stories Re: Dreams of Giants

    Here is my review, as requested. My keyboard is being kind of tupid, so if I am missing letters just ignore my spelling. Preamble: The very first part of your ...

    Mar 9, 2009
  • Romantic Novels Re: Khalilzad in 1995 (chapter one)

    Okay, so here is the review as requested. My 's' key is sticking so if I am missing some here and there please excuse it. Grammar: I know you didn't ...

    Mar 9, 2009
  • WRFF Archive Re: Rapid Reviews

    I will be visiting family tomorrow and Saturday, so if you want me to review something I probably won't be able to get to it until Sunday (3-8-09). Thanks for ...

    Mar 6, 2009
  • WRFF Archive Re: Rapid Reviews

    Come on people, I'm BORED!! Give me something, anything to review!! I promise you won't be disappointed.

    Mar 5, 2009
  • General Fiction Short Stories Re: Zombies Are People Too

    Good job, I was very entertained. I was going to nitpick it but Pippiedooda pretty much covered all that. As for the ending, what if you got rid of the ...

    Mar 5, 2009
  • Writing Tutorials Re: Advanced Character Development

    Wouldn't happy-go-lucky be someone who is really optimistic. So a bad trait for that could be that their naive? Idk, I had a hard time with my traits too

    Mar 4, 2009
  • WRFF Archive Re: Will review...

    Neopets!! I miss my neopets...They always died though. :cry: Anyways, I'd love for you to take a look at this novel I am working on. I have several chapters already ...

    Mar 3, 2009
  • WRFF Archive Re: Pippiedooda's presents! :)

    Hey Pippiedooda, I like your name. Oh and I'm always willing to support a fellow YWSer's addiction to reviews. If you don't mind: Chapter One Chapter Two Chapter Two Cont. ...

    Mar 3, 2009


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